Demented portrait

Avatar of Black_dahliade Black_dahlia în Poezii în Engleză 9 comentarii

It was sunny that day.
I sat on a bench and painted your face with the rainbow,
I squeezed the color out of it.
Till I was out of color…what a bummer.
Leaves…!!!
I smashed their pigment on my paper.
There’s some color for you dear.
I made your hair curly…
How childish, you straighten it up every day.
Your eyes are blue though, I used some violets…hmm
Fruity combination, some would say.
I smudged with crimson those full lips,
You better like it.
Come see me at the mental institute,
Love , Hannah.



9 Comentarii

  • Avatar of star77de star77

    Found some "pigments" of romanticism in your works. This one seems to be closer to my tastes. Liked the unexpected end. Waiting for some other "colors". (No marks - don't wanna spoil your rating :)).


  • Avatar of Black_dahliade Black_dahlia

    By all means please do :)
    Thank you for commenting .


  • Avatar of fenixonude fenixonu

    It Was sunny!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Avatar of Black_dahliade Black_dahlia

    it was :))LOL


  • Avatar of ClayofHopede ClayofHope

    The end is absolutely unexpected!
    Since you chose to finish it in this way,I think you might enjoy the book"The bell jar",by Sylvia Plath.I stronly reccomend it!


  • Avatar of Black_dahliade Black_dahlia

    Thanks for the suggestion:D
    I will def. look into that.


  • Avatar of ClayofHopede ClayofHope

    You are very welcome!:D


  • Avatar of MiniMaxde MiniMax

    A really nice work. I suppose the portrait is of Dorian Grey. No, seriously, the description is alike: curly hair, blue eyes... :) The picture with soul in it.
    Another book with unexpected ending... "A perfect day for Bananafish" by J. D. Salinger, well actually it's a short story.


  • de MickyMouse

    What can i say after these people have said before me but B.R.A.V.O. ( there is simply nothing else to say so far except that)


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